Josh
Characters were flimsy and it changed POV so many times I couldn't keep track. N'halia becomes an incredible fighter winning against people whose job it is to fight in a couple weeks... on the run. She also doesn't seem to care about the family that raised her when they die, not thinking about them again, until she decides she's fighting for revenge against a pit fighter she'd never meet before. which is then dropped immediately. nobody questions her attitude about anything. Things were often often times overexplained, even when it didn't need explaining
The Magic seems cool and unique but had inconsistencies and wasn't enough to keep me going.
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Seeing
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Characters kept “Grouding” themselves to mean they weren't going to be easily knocked over.
Characters were flimsy and it changed POV so many times I couldn't keep track. N'halia becomes an incredible fighter winning against people whose job it is to fight in a couple weeks... on the run. She also doesn't seem to care about the family that raised her when they die, not thinking about them again, until she decides she's fighting for revenge against a pit fighter she'd never meet before. which is then dropped immediately. nobody questions her attitude about anything. Things were often often times overexplained, even when it didn't need explaining
The Magic seems cool and unique but had inconsistencies and wasn't enough to keep me going.
Powers
Strength
Flame
Shadow
Light
Seeing
Hearing
Characters kept “Grouding” themselves to mean they weren't going to be easily knocked over.