Shadow over Tokyo

What in the...?

I'll admit the writing in this series wasn't Shakespeare, but it was nothing that made me notice it either. While it doesn't show it here on Goodreads, my copy says it is co-written by someone named Austin Rising. I sure hope the next one isn't as well.

DNF at 16%, immediately after reading multiple pages of crap like this (full disclosure, paragraph breaks did get lost in the paste):

‘She nodded. Wheeled the scooter around and headed back the way we'd come. We reached the restaurant. There were no necrotons. No people on the street. The restaurant was empty and silent. There were streaks of blood. Torn articles of clothing. Broken tables. The people were gone. Hannah hissed. “They killed everyone and took them.” “Yeah.” I stared back down the street toward the canals. Imagined the fresh bodies being piled on the floor. A necromancer looking at them. Deciding which ones to reanimate first.'

Did your comma key break?? There is no f-ing way I am reading an entire book written in short, choppy sentences like this. Sure, some authors might be able to pull it off, but these guys aren't it. I'm going to read a plot summary and then move on to the next one. If it continues like this, I'm done. The main characters are already unlikable jerks, so no reason to keep torturing myself.