Hidden Desires

Felt like a first draft

First, I'm not a huge stickler for perfect edits but there are a lot of errors that would be caught easily by one pass of even a beginner editor. It bugs me when it seems like something is just written without any attention to details before uploading.

Second the sex scenes are kinda odd. Both too short and done weird word choices. I'm not a fan of the word puss for pussy. Cause puss is seepage from a wound. So, not for me.

Last the whole thing felt like a personal fantasy written down. There wasn't much plot of reasoning. I think part of this was due to just being super short. So it did feel like someone wrote a first draft and just didn't go back and add the story elements to me.

It you're just looking for smut this might be okay. But for smut only if like more intense longer sex scenes personally.
1.5 stars because writing isn't easy and she'll probably get better and better with time!