Ratings924
Average rating3
Not a complete waste of time, but I saw this coming. I wish I could give this 2.5 stars. Two is a bit harsh, three is far too generous.
I thought most of the character development was decent, given how concise it was. Certain aspects, such as the Trolley Witch, were nearly unforgivable. While the introduction and dynamic brought by Scorpious was well achieved.
Since it was formatted as a script, very little can be said for character voice. That detail being largely left to actor/director interpretation. Lack of voice was distracting to a reader, and brought an almost monotone to the narrative.
Now, let's talk about one specific scene. Scorpious and Albus scheme to inform their parents of their whereabouts, and when-abouts for that matter. Despite this being the literal crux of the story, the point on which everything hinges, it was forced and I hated it. As a writer, I understand the pressure to impact the reader just right, while letting the story tell itself. It seemed the writers were also feeling the pressure, sadly, the buckled. The point was made, the plot was forwarded, the flow was halted. Forced and utilitarian.